Tebone7's Reviews

[Germaine's Web Cam : Foamy The Squirrel]

Germaine, the original E-Girl haha

[C.L.A.P. 2 : Words]

Good God..

I really do enjoy watching this, and probably more, listening to these. I visited China by myself for 2 months and couldn't stop thinking about how much this flash reminds me of China and how complex the language is. Yet, you can make it so much more fun to learn random characters just by using their language to make your flash.

Do you know some chinese or is it an aspiration to learn, or are you chinese? Any way it goes. I enjoy these flashes and do hope to see more as you continue to make a name for yourself on Newgrounds.

Rating:

Wasn't much animation, but the voice acting and overall artstyle of the flash was pretty good. Everything was crisp, clean, even throwing in humor with mispellings that if read as spelled, made a mockery of a chinese accent. Nice coloring scheme and papyrus look to the screen. 7, may be too high for what it is, but to me, the humor and overall spirit of the flash makes me believe it's worth about so. Thanks and have a great one!

RicePirate responds:

My mother is 100% Taiwanese (grandparents from Hunan). I was raised in Taiwan and Malaysia from ages 10-18, visiting Taipei every Summer since I was born. I speak conversational Chinese fluently, so no politics, science, etc.

[Forest 2013 - Chapter 1]

Not bad...

I really liked it- non-the less, I'll explain the score.

First I'll go over the things I did like:

I liked the storyline, as vague as it was, it was pretty cool. For once, it was a fair amount of original animation. It has the same concept as some other movie/game titles, but it varies with the creatures and character design. The sound effects were pretty spot on and the voice acting wasn't bad either, usually screams sound like a little kid yelling slightly while fading into the background, but in your case, it actually sounded more "realistic", it reminded me oddly of Left for Dead though.... Since you seem kind of new still, especially with an entire flash in a non-"sprite"-like animation, I think you sparred pretty well.

Though, the things I didn't like, but found amusing, would be some of the cartoon panning of other objects from different sources... such as the sniper rifle from halo and the rocket launcher from Call of Duty: Modern Warfare. The creatures were... "unique" to say the least, they were pretty well drawn, considering the rest of your animation. But parts of it that I didn't like was the way it's head would pan back and forth and nothing but a little stretching of the face, so to speak, would occur when their necks would move back and forth. Last thing that kinda bugged me was the opening song, Clubbed to Death. It kinda fit, but in the back of my head it kept pounding "No.". In this type of scenario I suppose it's okay, but I, personally, would prefer something different, more grungy, something that would make you feel your in a camp of survivors or something, not the Matrix or Blade.

A few things that I didn't like at all would be the arms and torso connection of the troops with the AKs. It looked too awkward to me, they seemed to be too far out, like the shoulders were too large for the rest of the body, making more of a "T" shaped body. Their mechanical movements seemed odd also, they also seemed to all breath in unison, I personally don't like that because it just makes it look they're all just copies of each other, rather than unique characters (even though they all look the same..) Idk, there seemed to be a lack of a lot of detail in the background, i did see better detail toward the end, but all around there was a lack of it. I'm not asking for shadow's of the characters or anything you already kinda had that, but just some of the overall background slides... Other than the ally, there wasn't any shading through the city or anything, real lack of detail IMO.

Overall, this animation kept me entertained and that's the main part, I just ask for a little more detail and a little cleaner animation tweening. Maybe when your done with the second one, go through a little more and add some detailed shadowing or something, the more you clean up your animation the better you'll get at animation. This isn't horrible, so don't get me wrong when I ask for a little improvement, I try to pick apart all that I can so I can try to help you improve. Not quite sure I did so well this time around, but I hope it helps a little or something.

Animation: 3/5
Graphics/Art: 2/5
Music: 2/5
Originality: 2/5
Other (I.E. voice acting): 4/5
Overall: 6/10

Keep up the work, you have some potential, you just have to force yourself to be more artistic when it comes to detailing things, that's your biggest problem i think, that and maybe tweening.

[Blackboard Squash]

Fairly good game

I liked it for a little while, but when i got to level 10 and didn't lose a life because it was so easy, i got bored and quit. I do like the style and overall look of the game. It was a nice idea, but for some reason it didn't challenge me. Otherwise nice job, not too good of replay value imo. Oh, and try to put more music into the game other than just the one song, that loop got a little annoying after listening to it 2 going on 3 times

[Spliter]

Wow

For your first game, it is actually a lot of fun. Though, there was a little trouble telling how many points i had during the game.... idk if its just because of the choice of letter coloring, but still. This game is FUN xD. Keep up the good work :). Maybe next time add in some mellow music to go with it, nothing strong, or put in a music b utton at the top. Just suggestions :), keep up the good work i hope to see more.

[Mastermind: World Conqueror]

Very well constructed game.

Very nice job, it was a well constructed game, the voice tutorial and voice acting was great. Again, pristine job, keep up the good work, I hope to see more of this quality of games come from your 'Mastermind' :D.

[Procyon II]

Being an Armin van Buuren fan for many years now, I will throw a little respect at the attempt. I know where the original background stems from and I'm not knocking the lyrics that [i]you[/i] made, but it really does not fit the music tone at all. I feel this could be a lot better if the lyrics were given a different melody to flow with. Like, I mean that your lyrics don't line up with the beat of the song at all, though it very closely mimics the Youtopia beat, the lyrics do not fit this song.

Sorry for my lack of grammar and sentence structure, I'm tired and typically do not write reviews very much anymore. But since I really enjoy the original and heard this, I had to write at least something. What I would like to see from you is for you to remake this song with an original tune with the same lyrics. I feel that this song would be better in that respect than taking a tune that was designed for a different set of lyrics and putting in yours instead.

You could also throw in some more effects along the way versus keeping the same looping melody in the background. Make sound bits to throw in along with the melody and switch up the song some, I understand you are still learning, so don't take this review the wrong way. Again, I am pretty tired so that may affect the way that I'm writing this review or how it comes off as.

Anywho, keep working at it and you'll find your swing.

[MMZX - Trap Factory]

Amazing xD.

This song is awesome xD, like a super fast beat version of megaman. I don't think you could have done anything better on this song, lol. I love every bit of it and recently I don't full heartily "like" a song, but this one just hits home. I heard it on the "Death vs. Monstars" game and loved it ever since. It's just great, good music for anything with a lot of stuff going on. Keep up the good stuff xD.

[Kaitana]

Great

Nice fast pace given to it, sounded familiar for some reason, but none the less, it wasn't too shabby. Keep at it

eVr responds:

Thanks!

[🔧Roll Caskett🔧]

This is the type of Rtil I'm used to, great angle and perspective, fun vibrant coloring and shadows. You can easily tell this is your style, love it man. Keep up the good work, love seeing pieces like this.

[Callie Briggs]

Finally, a reference to my username after all these years, I thought people forgot about this show

[Z TEAM CHALK]

This is good

I really like the work you put into this, chalk is trick to work with and it's turning out pretty good! I really like the detail that you put in with the light refractions and what not. It's a really big picture so i mean, that's a lot of work you got. Your understanding of light has really benefit you for the better. Proportions are righteous I'll give ya another holler if you can do something like this again, it really sucks ass that it rained, but at least you got this much in. Cool work, keep it up :)

XxThumbsuckerxX responds:

thanks a ton! This made me smile (:
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